delph_ambi wrote:The precise wording depends on how you read it, and your own natural intonation. Your Irish lilt is going to sound very different to my vague cockney with Geordie overtones and a veneer of English public school. The important thing is that you've been reading it aloud, which is THE most important thing when writing poetry. Once it sounds natural to you, it's right. Doesn't matter how anyone else reads it.
That is one of the soundest bits of guidance I have ever read Delph. Thank you for that...
I will now log it for the media production side of things and put a copy of the edited piece into my collection on here.
I will also link to your website as a hyperlink of your name and give you full credit for edit.
lol - 'credit for edit'... Sounds like the title of something I still have to write...
delph_ambi wrote:I really like this poem. And the explanation of the title was fascinating. Your final version looks spot on to me.