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Postby Catherine Edmunds » Thu Jun 29, 2006 6:15 pm

Everyone can write limericks. Theoretically. Then you look at the rules, and think, "eek!" But they do need to be followed for this form to work.

The rhyme scheme is simple. AABBA. The first A can even be the identical rhyme to the last A (Edward Lear does this a lot) though that always feels like cheating.

The rhythm's a bit more complex. (takes a deep breath...)

The beat is anapestic (weak, weak, strong) with three feet in lines 1, 2 and 5; and two feet in lines 3 and 4. There are exceptions. The first foot of any line may have only one weak beat in front of the stong beat, and trailing weak beats are allowed at the end of each line.
Thus, lines 1, 2 and 5 are (where the bracketed beats are the optional extras):
w (w) S w w S w w S (w) (w)
and lines 3 and 4 are:
w (w) S w w S (w) (w)

If I go into any more detail, this starts getting pedantic. There are plenty of sites that will explain further.

Now, I normally post an example of my own writing at this point. I tried writing a topical limerick, but it all started looking slightly defamatory, so I deleted it. That's the problem with limericks. Easy to get carried away. If you do a quick google you'll find a whole load of really rude ones too... Instead, here's a classic by (I hope this attribution is correct) Arthur Butler, first published in 'Punch', 19th December 1923.

There was a young lady called Bright
Who could travel much faster than light.
She set out one day
In a relative way
And returned on the previous night.

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The Vampires, Bo 'n' Mo - by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Thu Jun 29, 2006 11:50 pm

The Vampires, Bo 'n' Mo
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
    an aging gay vampire called maurice
    swiftly flew over lakes, homes and forests
    he swooped from the night
    and to his delight
    bit the neck of a young man called boris

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Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Fri Jun 30, 2006 11:47 am

Sorry Delph. It was late lastnight when I wrote that vampire limerick. I realise now that the rythym is out on the first, second and last lines. Will try and fix it later today, but I am chuffed to bits that it's mostly completed. Laughed my head off while writing it...

Thanks for the guidance on writing limericks :)
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Postby Catherine Edmunds » Sat Jul 01, 2006 8:59 am

Great limerick, but yes, you're right, the rhythm's not quite there. Shows how flippin' hard it is to write these.

Your first line's fine. Remember, in the scheme I showed, the bracketed beats are optional, so you're okay, so long as you can make the second and last lines follow the same scheme.

an aging gay vampire called maurice
flew fast over lakes, homes and forests


works, for example.

Your middle two lines are almost right. An extra syllable in the second would make them match more neatly, eg:

he swooped from the night
and then to his delight


Last line's hilarious but more problematic. It fits one of the possible rhythm schemes, but doesn't match the first two lines as it stands. I'll have to think about this one...

...okay, I've thunk, and my gut instinct is to leave it exactly as it is. One can get too pedantic about these things...

Nice one, Lugh :D

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Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Sat Jul 01, 2006 11:56 am

The Vampires, Bo 'n' Mo
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
Edited by Catherine Edmunds
    an aging gay vampire called maurice
    flew fast over lakes, homes and forests
    he swooped from the night
    and then to his delight
    bit the neck of a young man called boris
Cheers Delph :)

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