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The Gadget's Man. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2001 / 2006
Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 11:16 am
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
The Gadget's Man.
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2001 / 2006. All Rights Reserved.- just like me
he's a gadget's man.
he'd fiddle with the video
every weekend,
flicking through the channels
while flicking ash
into his beer can,
he'd curse at it
lyrically,
like a song.
'you feckin' heap of crap!'
he'd say.
'do you see this son?
never buy a gadget
without its
brand name on!'
he'd decide to take it apart.
he'd start with the outer casing,
side panels,
then the circuits,
wires and diodes
which he'd lay out on the floor.
he never used a screwdriver.
he swore by the butterknife.
just one memory
of my dad back then.
the gadget's man
who gave me life...
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The Gadget's Man is an old performance poetry piece of mine that I've decided to dust down and present on here. Diarmuid, Sean Óg and myself have been messing around with images for it and will be working on the audio performance some time soon. The Gadget's Man was displayed on the former MSN Sensitize up until 2004 when the community was closed.
Delph, if you think it needs layout or punctuation corrections, I would really appreciate your help mate, thanks
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 7:22 pm
by Catherine Edmunds
Super piece, Lugh. This is the first time I've seen it. Two points occur to me: one - you don't use any capitals in the text, so I wouldn't use them in the title. Two - gadgets is a simply plural, so ditch the apostrophe on every occasion, both within the text and the title. Apart from that, I'd consider a full stop rather than a comma after 'beer can' and add a comma after 'diodes'.
Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 8:36 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
delph_ambi wrote:Super piece, Lugh. This is the first time I've seen it. Two points occur to me: one - you don't use any capitals in the text, so I wouldn't use them in the title. Two - gadgets is a simply plural, so ditch the apostrophe on every occasion, both within the text and the title. Apart from that, I'd consider a full stop rather than a comma after 'beer can' and add a comma after 'diodes'.
Cheers Delph
I will leave the original one above to show as a 'work-in-progress' between us should any funders ever find us and add the edited version below (next post), and also add it to my
Collected Works folder.
Nice one
the gadgets man. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2001 / 2006.
Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 8:40 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
the gadgets man.
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2001 / 2006. All Rights Reserved.
Editor - Catherine Edmunds...- just like me
he's a gadgets man.
he'd fiddle with the video
every weekend,
flicking through the channels
while flicking ash
into his beer can.
he'd curse at it
lyrically,
like a song.
'you feckin' heap of crap!'
he'd say.
'do you see this son?
never buy a gadget
without its
brand name on!'
he'd decide to take it apart.
he'd start with the outer casing,
side panels,
then the circuits,
wires and diodes,
which he'd lay out on the floor.
he never used a screwdriver.
he swore by the butterknife.
just one memory
of my dad back then.
the gadgets man
who gave me life...
the gadgets man
Posted: Fri Aug 18, 2006 6:42 pm
by Salvador Oria
hehehe..., this 'gadget man' reminds me of one gadget vendor
that we met at an electropub managed by a dirty-minded Irishman some time ago
. He's off business now... the vendor, not the Irishman.
Keep the good work, said Aunt Sensie.