Ode To John Peel. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

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Ode To John Peel. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Mon Sep 04, 2006 2:12 pm

ode to john peel
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved
Editor - Catherine Edmunds

    the summer has been silenced
    airwaves bleed but feel less real
    festivals are lifeless jokes
    without his love, his zeal

    and some things maintain balance
    others keep good vibes intact
    his undertones discovery
    kept our minds tuned to this fact

    his sessions show on radio one
    got new bands a record deal
    so this poem is for all of that
    i say 'well played, mr peel...'
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Postby Catherine Edmunds » Tue Sep 05, 2006 2:37 pm

Old Grey Whistle test presenter? Since when? Hmm... I only remember 'whispering' Bob Harris. Will just go and check...

Right; first presenter, Richard Williams, then whispering Bob, then Annie Nightingale, then in quick succession Andy Kershaw, David Hepworth and Mark Ellen. John Peel may have done a guest show or two, but I've a feeling that's all, so I'd change that second stanza if I were you, Lugh.

Nice poem though. I like its simplicity and obvious respect and affection for John Peel.

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Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Tue Sep 05, 2006 4:21 pm

Thanks Delph :D

Sorted mate 8) ...
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Postby Catherine Edmunds » Tue Sep 05, 2006 5:28 pm

Yeah, that's better Lugh.

Here are a few other points.

First stanza, I love the rhymes of bleed/feel/real/zeal and the alliteration of summer/silenced and less/lifeless/love.

Second stanza makes sense now. 'somethings' needs to be 'some things' though.

Third stanza, drop the apostrophe from the end of sessions. Not needed. The show didn't belong to the sessions, it was a simply a sessions show, like a dog show (not a dog's show). I like the way you return to the original rhyme in this last stanza. Ties it all together nicely.

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Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Tue Sep 05, 2006 6:16 pm

delph_ambi wrote:Yeah, that's better Lugh.

Here are a few other points.

First stanza, I love the rhymes of bleed/feel/real/zeal and the alliteration of summer/silenced and less/lifeless/love.

Second stanza makes sense now. 'somethings' needs to be 'some things' though.

Third stanza, drop the apostrophe from the end of sessions. Not needed. The show didn't belong to the sessions, it was a simply a sessions show, like a dog show (not a dog's show). I like the way you return to the original rhyme in this last stanza. Ties it all together nicely.


Nice one Delph :D

Cheers :)
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