Ode To John Peel. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

[Louis P. Burns aka Lugh]

ode to john peel
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved
Editor - Catherine Edmunds

• the summer has been silenced
  airwaves bleed but feel less real
  festivals are lifeless jokes
  without his love, his zeal
  
  and some things maintain balance
  others keep good vibes intact
  his undertones discovery
  kept our minds tuned to this fact
  
  his sessions show on radio one
  got new bands a record deal
  so this poem is for all of that
  i say 'well played, mr peel...'

[Catherine Edmunds]

Old Grey Whistle test presenter? Since when? Hmm... I only remember 'whispering' Bob Harris. Will just go and check...

Right; first presenter, Richard Williams, then whispering Bob, then Annie Nightingale, then in quick succession Andy Kershaw, David Hepworth and Mark Ellen. John Peel may have done a guest show or two, but I've a feeling that's all, so I'd change that second stanza if I were you, Lugh.

Nice poem though. I like its simplicity and obvious respect and affection for John Peel.

[Louis P. Burns aka Lugh]

Thanks Delph

Sorted mate ...

[Catherine Edmunds]

Yeah, that's better Lugh.

Here are a few other points.

First stanza, I love the rhymes of bleed/feel/real/zeal and the alliteration of summer/silenced and less/lifeless/love.

Second stanza makes sense now. 'somethings' needs to be 'some things' though.

Third stanza, drop the apostrophe from the end of sessions. Not needed. The show didn't belong to the sessions, it was a simply a sessions show, like a dog show (not a dog's show). I like the way you return to the original rhyme in this last stanza. Ties it all together nicely.

[Louis P. Burns aka Lugh]

Yeah, that's better Lugh.

Here are a few other points.

First stanza, I love the rhymes of bleed/feel/real/zeal and the alliteration of summer/silenced and less/lifeless/love.

Second stanza makes sense now. 'somethings' needs to be 'some things' though.

Third stanza, drop the apostrophe from the end of sessions. Not needed. The show didn't belong to the sessions, it was a simply a sessions show, like a dog show (not a dog's show). I like the way you return to the original rhyme in this last stanza. Ties it all together nicely.

Nice one Delph

Cheers

[Catherine Edmunds]

Err... just noticed a few more tiny errors.

Should be 'well played, mr peel...' not 'well played mr. peel'..., or in other words, needs a comma after 'played'; the closing speech mark should come after the ellipses; and you should drop the full stop after mr as it's archaic.

[Louis P. Burns aka Lugh]

Changes made.

Cheers Delph mate. Much appreciated...

[Salvador Oria]

Where's Diana Rigg?

[Louis P. Burns aka Lugh]

Where's Diana Rigg?

I ate her