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Postby joanne chapman » Thu Mar 02, 2006 11:30 pm

Good evening Lugh, sorry for the delay.

Leander, I agree with you, ‘Foggy Thoughts of you’ is a beautiful piece of work. When I read it for the first time over a month ago I was captivated. It is probably because I like it so much that I want more.

Lugh, you know I’m not that good with words but I will do my best to explain.

On the first of December
a menacing thief of thick,
white fog stole in...
The night before, I'd made Irish Stew.
As it reheated I set up my camera.

This took me into the place where you were, set the tone, almost seeing and feeling the moment.

I watched through aching,
arched sunlight and saw us,
lost to one another.
Vapours slowly,
swirling, around.
Fingers touched
then clutched
then covered both decks
of the Craigavon Bridge.

This is perfection! Beautiful words capturing the timeless moment of Love, lost together as if the world had stopped and they were the only people left. No one and nothing else was needed, they had it all.

Heat gently rose up
filling the room.
Moisture trickled down my
window on the world.
I opened it
and put on a sweater.

I can feel the warmth, damp air and almost taste the stew simmering on the gas.

I was a witness.
I thought of
time-lapse.
Then angles.
Then angels.
Then you...

This is a never-ending end, it leaves us to continue to think, reflect and get lost in our own thoughts.


I have to speak now and relate this to similar feelings of a lost love. When I think of this person its like, I am breathing with only one lung. Every corner I go round I hope to see someone who looks like them. Their clothes have now lost the unique smell. I am angry that they are not here with me, even though I can’t be angry with them. The need to touch them once again is like constantly eating and never feeling full, a constant craving that can not be fed. To feel their breath or hear their voice is now only a longed for dream.

Love is perfect and you have written such beautiful words about this day and your feelings for this person. I would have liked to see another verse before the end, which is my own opinion. You ache for this person.

Jox

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Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Thu Mar 02, 2006 11:58 pm

jo wrote:Good evening Lugh, sorry for the delay.

Leander, I agree with you, ‘Foggy Thoughts of you’ is a beautiful piece of work. When I read it for the first time over a month ago I was captivated. It is probably because I like it so much that I want more.

Lugh, you know I’m not that good with words but I will do my best to explain.

On the first of December
a menacing thief of thick,
white fog stole in...
The night before, I'd made Irish Stew.
As it reheated I set up my camera.

This took me into the place where you were, set the tone, almost seeing and feeling the moment.

I watched through aching,
arched sunlight and saw us,
lost to one another.
Vapours slowly,
swirling, around.
Fingers touched
then clutched
then covered both decks
of the Craigavon Bridge.

This is perfection! Beautiful words capturing the timeless moment of Love, lost together as if the world had stopped and they were the only people left. No one and nothing else was needed, they had it all.

Heat gently rose up
filling the room.
Moisture trickled down my
window on the world.
I opened it
and put on a sweater.

I can feel the warmth, damp air and almost taste the stew simmering on the gas.

I was a witness.
I thought of
time-lapse.
Then angles.
Then angels.
Then you...

This is a never-ending end, it leaves us to continue to think, reflect and get lost in our own thoughts.


I have to speak now and relate this to similar feelings of a lost love. When I think of this person its like, I am breathing with only one lung. Every corner I go round I hope to see someone who looks like them. Their clothes have now lost the unique smell. I am angry that they are not here with me, even though I can’t be angry with them. The need to touch them once again is like constantly eating and never feeling full, a constant craving that can not be fed. To feel their breath or hear their voice is now only a longed for dream.

Love is perfect and you have written such beautiful words about this day and your feelings for this person. I would have liked to see another verse before the end, which is my own opinion. You ache for this person.

Jox


Cheers Jo :D

You've just done your first review on a new media artform. Not a lot of people can say that... Thank you. Knowing that the piece worked to leave a viewer feeling the same way as the character, in this case me and that day, has really made me happy.

Happy may be too cheerful a word though. But, it's that energy thing that happens when we view something creative and get an essence and feeling for where the artist or writer was at when the work was created.

That's the magic.

In all honesty, this piece, although sticking rigidly to its' theme, did go through a few slight changes after getting advice off a highly talented poet called Mike D. It was more about line-spacing than anything else and I am grateful he took time to review it.

Just one wee footnote lol. This isn't actually about the loss of a person strangely enough. Foggy Thoughts Of You came about as a result of the heavy fog that day and my mood about the original Sensitize which had been closed down following complaints from some very greedy and silly people...
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Postby joanne chapman » Fri Mar 03, 2006 12:12 am

Shut up, shut up, shut up!

Don't tell me no more, I prefer to think and make it to be what I want to see it as.

It's me that don't know when to shut up, remember! :wink:

Don't you dare to spoil it for me.

I am now gonna try and forget what you have said, bitch!

I want to ask you a couple of questions, where do I post them?

Jox
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Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Fri Mar 03, 2006 12:17 am

jo wrote:Shut up, shut up, shut up!

Don't tell me no more, I prefer to think and make it to be what I want to see it as.

It's me that don't know when to shut up, remember! :wink:

Don't you dare to spoil it for me.

I am now gonna try and forget what you have said, bitch!

I want to ask you a couple of questions, where do I post them?

Jox
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Right. I'll shut up lol... :P

Aye. Ask away mate... You might not get any answers until tomorrow because I'm exhausted right now...
Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
Administrator, editor & owner of the Sensitize © online community of forums and domain for artists, e-poets, filmmakers, media/music producers and writers working through here. To buy the Kindle book of Illustrated Poetry, Sensitize © - Volume One / Poems that could be Films if they were Funded by myself with illustrations by Welsh filmmaker and graphic artist; Norris Nuvo click here for N. Ireland and UK sales. If purchasing in the U.S.A. or internationally then please click here.

ASIN B00L1RS0UI

My writing is not covered by Creative Commons policy and may not be republished without permission. All rights reserved. All Sensitize © Arts sponsorship donations and postal inquiries to:

Louis P. Burns
42 Farland Way
DERRY
N. Ireland.
BT48 0RS
Telephone (UK): 028 71219225


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Postby joanne chapman » Fri Mar 03, 2006 12:40 am

jo wrote:How do I post some photographs?

Where should I get the 'quicktime' whatever it is to play your short film?

I am really shit with computers.


Hi Jo :)

Post photographs to Lugh on his google account mate. Please note these are for arts purposes only and your copyright will remain as stated by you always. We may not display all pictures, but will work with what we can, although there is no timeframe on this. If it happens, it happens...

Did you not get a prompt to download the right player? All of our stuff opens on Windows Media Player, Real Player, Winamp and Quicktime. If you're running Quicktime, check for any updates.

Best wishes.


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