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- Salvador Oria
- poet & writer
- Posts: 63
- Joined: Tue Feb 28, 2006 6:51 pm
- Location: buenos aires, argentina
When they were born
God couldn't find one available
and they came to this world
to cannibalise others'.
Even then they cannot have one of their own.
Have you ever met one of these specimens?
I did. There's one not far from where we meet
although at times she may stay in bed
to regain health for her next attack.
This will not last for ever.
One day she wont be able to come back!
©Sept 2006 Salvador Oria aka Argie
(Originally posted in D1; deleted by the author
after a week. It refers to a site's former Manager)
were my refuge when annoyed - my dearest pleasure when free."
mary shelley in her author's introduction to "frankestein", 1831.
- Catherine Edmunds
- artist, poet & writer
- Posts: 428
- Joined: Fri May 05, 2006 8:05 pm
- Location: north east england
One can but hope they will.
As a poem, it is not particularly 'poetic', but you've succeeded in the difficult task of writing about the soul without resorting to clichés. This poem was written for a particular time and place, and as such, it worked brilliantly.
Even better. Let's think up new soul cliches for the 21st century.
Hmmmmm. "New Soul Cliches for the Modern Man" sounds like the next album released by my fictional/mythical California Hippy character "Ogden Kapov and the Fathers of Adversity". Hmmmm. I'll need some songtitles and lyrics for it.
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