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croquet and cucumber

Postby Catherine Edmunds » Fri May 05, 2006 10:31 pm

I was watching the children play croquet one day
amongst rounded towers and buddleia
lost in my thoughts, and barely aware
when a seagull flew overhead
calling a warning I should have heard
but foolish me, I ignored the bird
didn't heed, didn't think I need worry

seconds later, the head of a mallet
came flying at speed and knocked me out cold

I wandered alone for twenty-five years
in a starry place
where seagulls play croquet with eels for mallets
(which don't work, being hopelessly bendy)

you okay, mum? asked a passing haddock

I think I mumbled, 'yes pet, don't worry',
before setting off on a deep sea trek
in my patent diving bell
that chimed on the hour every hour
ding dong shrimp
bong

the gong was so loud that it woke me up
brought me back blinking and stupid
I touched the bump on the top of my head
it wasn't too bad
so I gathered the children and took them inside
for cucumber sarnies and tea

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Postby joanne chapman » Fri May 05, 2006 11:15 pm

Hello Delph_ambi

What an imagination you have!!

I like your style. :D

Had a bird shit on a new white suit years ago, no heads of mallet.

What is Buddleia?

Jox

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Postby Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Sat May 06, 2006 3:53 am

Hi delph :D

Nice intro 8)

I've read this a few times now and see that it could lend itself to film, or animation, very easily... Were you aware of this while writing it..?

Please don't feel pressured to answer. My thoughts are just observations for now ;)...

Classic piece mate...
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Postby Catherine Edmunds » Sat May 06, 2006 7:53 am

Hi Jo

Buddleia is 'butterfly bush', that garden shrub with the intensely scented purple flowers that gets covered in peacock butterflies in the summer. Glad you liked the poem :) My stuff varies from the whimsical to the marginally obscene to the incredibly formal stuffed shirt sonnet type thing.

Lugh, I was more thanking my lucky stars that my son didn't actually manage to fell me with a flying mallet, though it was a close thing. I've never really thought much about poetry in terms of animation, but can see I'm in the right environment here :wink: In fact... yes... hmm... I have quite a few poems that might lend themselves to that sort of treatment. I'll dig a few out now and again.

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Postby joanne chapman » Sat May 06, 2006 8:47 am

Thanks, I like marginal obscenity (and complete lunacy) I reserve formal stuff for Union meetings. :lol:

Check out Leanders work sometime, he's very imaginative as well, think you'd enjoy it.

Jox


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