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Limerick
Everyone can write limericks. Theoretically. Then you look at the rules, and think, "eek!" But they do need to be followed for this form to work.
The rhyme scheme is simple. AABBA. The first A can even be the identical rhyme to the last A (Edward Lear does this a lot) though that always feels like cheating.
The rhythm's a bit more complex. (takes a deep breath...)
The beat is anapestic (weak, weak, strong) with three feet in lines 1, 2 and 5; and two feet in lines 3 and 4. There are exceptions. The first foot of any line may have only one weak beat in front of the stong beat, and trailing weak beats are allowed at the end of each line.
Thus, lines 1, 2 and 5 are (where the bracketed beats are the optional extras):
w (w) S w w S w w S (w) (w)
and lines 3 and 4 are:
w (w) S w w S (w) (w)
If I go into any more detail, this starts getting pedantic. There are plenty of sites that will explain further.
Now, I normally post an example of my own writing at this point. I tried writing a topical limerick, but it all started looking slightly defamatory, so I deleted it. That's the problem with limericks. Easy to get carried away. If you do a quick google you'll find a whole load of really rude ones too... Instead, here's a classic by (I hope this attribution is correct) Arthur Butler, first published in 'Punch', 19th December 1923.
There was a young lady called Bright
Who could travel much faster than light.
She set out one day
In a relative way
And returned on the previous night.
The rhyme scheme is simple. AABBA. The first A can even be the identical rhyme to the last A (Edward Lear does this a lot) though that always feels like cheating.
The rhythm's a bit more complex. (takes a deep breath...)
The beat is anapestic (weak, weak, strong) with three feet in lines 1, 2 and 5; and two feet in lines 3 and 4. There are exceptions. The first foot of any line may have only one weak beat in front of the stong beat, and trailing weak beats are allowed at the end of each line.
Thus, lines 1, 2 and 5 are (where the bracketed beats are the optional extras):
w (w) S w w S w w S (w) (w)
and lines 3 and 4 are:
w (w) S w w S (w) (w)
If I go into any more detail, this starts getting pedantic. There are plenty of sites that will explain further.
Now, I normally post an example of my own writing at this point. I tried writing a topical limerick, but it all started looking slightly defamatory, so I deleted it. That's the problem with limericks. Easy to get carried away. If you do a quick google you'll find a whole load of really rude ones too... Instead, here's a classic by (I hope this attribution is correct) Arthur Butler, first published in 'Punch', 19th December 1923.
There was a young lady called Bright
Who could travel much faster than light.
She set out one day
In a relative way
And returned on the previous night.
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The Vampires, Bo 'n' Mo - by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
The Vampires, Bo 'n' Mo
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
- an aging gay vampire called maurice
swiftly flew over lakes, homes and forests
he swooped from the night
and to his delight
bit the neck of a young man called boris
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Sorry Delph. It was late lastnight when I wrote that vampire limerick. I realise now that the rythym is out on the first, second and last lines. Will try and fix it later today, but I am chuffed to bits that it's mostly completed. Laughed my head off while writing it...
Thanks for the guidance on writing limericks
Thanks for the guidance on writing limericks
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Great limerick, but yes, you're right, the rhythm's not quite there. Shows how flippin' hard it is to write these.
Your first line's fine. Remember, in the scheme I showed, the bracketed beats are optional, so you're okay, so long as you can make the second and last lines follow the same scheme.
an aging gay vampire called maurice
flew fast over lakes, homes and forests
works, for example.
Your middle two lines are almost right. An extra syllable in the second would make them match more neatly, eg:
he swooped from the night
and then to his delight
Last line's hilarious but more problematic. It fits one of the possible rhythm schemes, but doesn't match the first two lines as it stands. I'll have to think about this one...
...okay, I've thunk, and my gut instinct is to leave it exactly as it is. One can get too pedantic about these things...
Nice one, Lugh
Your first line's fine. Remember, in the scheme I showed, the bracketed beats are optional, so you're okay, so long as you can make the second and last lines follow the same scheme.
an aging gay vampire called maurice
flew fast over lakes, homes and forests
works, for example.
Your middle two lines are almost right. An extra syllable in the second would make them match more neatly, eg:
he swooped from the night
and then to his delight
Last line's hilarious but more problematic. It fits one of the possible rhythm schemes, but doesn't match the first two lines as it stands. I'll have to think about this one...
...okay, I've thunk, and my gut instinct is to leave it exactly as it is. One can get too pedantic about these things...
Nice one, Lugh
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The Vampires, Bo 'n' Mo
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
Edited by Catherine Edmunds
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by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
Edited by Catherine Edmunds
- an aging gay vampire called maurice
flew fast over lakes, homes and forests
he swooped from the night
and then to his delight
bit the neck of a young man called boris
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Lol. This morning I sent a copy to one of my gay pals. He phoned me and laughed everytime he read it back to me. He also asked if he could share it with others.
So, how cool is that ?
I agree that 'then' could be left in or removed. Let's just leave it for now eh?
Right. Your turn to write one lol. I've ended up with a Limerick accent ...
So, how cool is that ?
I agree that 'then' could be left in or removed. Let's just leave it for now eh?
Right. Your turn to write one lol. I've ended up with a Limerick accent ...
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hahahahahha
Excellent
Excellent
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Vampires are always certain of their sexuality. It's werewolves that haven't got a clue...jo wrote:Hahaha
Now I know what you two get up to in your spare time.
What about the vampires that are not sure of their sexuality?
Jox
Cuh. Dear oh... I thought you'd have known that Jo ...
Now, go write 100 times:-
'Vampires are totally sussed sexually. It's werewolves who'll bite anyone'...
In your best handwriting ...
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One of my favourite limericks:-
there was a woman in Vancouver
who had an affair with a hoover
instead of a ....
it gave her a suck
and took her six weeks to recover
there was a woman in Vancouver
who had an affair with a hoover
instead of a ....
it gave her a suck
and took her six weeks to recover
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for an expendable president. Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
for an expendable president
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 31st July, 2006. All Rights Reserved
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 31st July, 2006. All Rights Reserved
- if President George Bush was shot dead.
or knifed in the street by a crack-head.
would anyone care?
would they blink, would they stare?
or loudly laugh as the sick bastard bled?
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hahahhahahahahahaLugh wrote:for an expendable president
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 31st July, 2006. All Rights Reserved
- if President George Bush was shot dead.
or knifed in the street by a crack-head.
would anyone care?
would they blink, would they stare?
or loudly laugh as the sick bastard bled?
Channel 4 have it sorted ... Click the blue font above...
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