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Fib

Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 5:30 pm
by Catherine Edmunds
The 'fib' is a form based on the Fibonacci sequence. It was first brought to public attention by Gregory K. Pincus on 1st April 2006 in his blog, and since then, has swept the internet. Why? It's easy, and addictive. To write one, start with a one syllable line, then a two syllable line, then continue with each line's syllable count being the sum of the previous two, ie, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, etc. The classic fib (if there can already be such a thing) stops at 8, but plenty go further.

I find the form lends itself to throwaway fun poems. I've rarely seen anything very profound expressed in one, but the form's very new, so who knows what will happen. Here are a few of my own, to give you the idea.

Health and Safety at Work

If
the axe
is dirty
caked in nasty germs
(not sterilised, in other words)

I’m
afraid
you could get
a very nasty
infection (septicaemia).

That
is why
I will be
extremely careful,
though why it matters, I’m not sure.

It’s
not as
if you will
survive having your
head chopped off. Eh? Your majesty?


In the Beginning

I
started
out as a
small primeval blob –
a blip in a hot thermal spring

but
wanting
so much more –
a husband, children.
So I evolved, and here I am.

I
wonder.
Was it right
to do all of that?
Or should I have remained alone?

(I
doubt if
single cells
spend this time of year
worrying about Christmas gifts.)

If
only
I could go
back to summer
in the boiling hot springs of life.

But
No. It’s
not to be.
I have to conform,
have to join the queues and the rush.

So
listen,
good people.
Evolution sucks.
I mean it folks. Just don’t go there.


mud pies and moonbeams

I
like to
make mud pies
or maybe rabbits
but the soil must be full of clay
or the rabbits’ ears fall off, and that is annoying

I
like to
feel soil squidge
between my fingers
as I mould it into the shape
of a pie or rabbit or whatever else I make

I
like to
eat mud pies
but then mum gets cross
and says that rabbit is better
as she wipes the mud from my hands, face, fingers and mouth

I
like to
trip across
moonbeams with rabbits
running hoppity hop, but mum
says my head is in the clouds and I’ll be late for tea

Edited 15/9/07
PLEASE NOTE
Since writing the above, it's been pointed out to me that you need TWO single syllable lines at the start of an authentic 'fib', as the sequence begins 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 etc. Sincere apologies for getting this wrong.

Honey On Toast by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 6:19 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
Whoa :lol: These are brilliant Delph...

honey on toast
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved.

yum
I
love to
smear honey
all over my toast
nibble the crunchy edges most

slurp!
then
work in
sticky chin
do i care? no chance
it's a simple pleasure i'm sure

a
mate
of mine
marmite man
doesn't understand
but i'm an unsavoury git

you
see
the joy
for me is
the sweetness oozing
you'll never catch me refusing

Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 6:38 pm
by Catherine Edmunds
Haha! :D

They are SO compulsive, aren't they; such fun. Excellent example there, Lugh.

Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 6:40 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
delph_ambi wrote:Haha! :D

They are SO compulsive, aren't they; such fun. Excellent example there, Lugh.
Yip :lol: giggled my chops off while writing it Delph mate... As addictive as honey on toast imho :wink: ...

Campaign! By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 4:55 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
campaign!
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved.

  • a
    child
    sudan
    starvation
    we all turn away
    who wants to accept that today?

    bad
    men
    iraq
    war machines
    endlessly churning
    out fresh dead. like a spit turning

    so
    when
    will we
    awaken?
    when will we see that
    this can be changed? open your eyes

    please
    don't
    remain
    blind sided
    stop running away
    campaign! we can stop this today...

Re: Campaign! By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 5:11 pm
by psikottix
Lugh wrote:campaign!
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved.
  • child
    sudan
    starvation
    we all turn away
    who wants to accept that today?

    men
    iraq
    war machines
    endlessly churning
    out fresh dead. like a spit turning

    when
    will we
    awaken?
    when will we see that
    this can be changed? open your eyes

    don't
    remain
    blind sided
    stop running away
    campaign! we can stop this today...
Excuse my language all those tha are offended by words....but that is fucking great, mate. I'm really moved by that.

Thank you for sharing!

Re: Campaign! By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 5:19 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
psikottix wrote:
Excuse my language all those tha are offended by words....but that is fucking great, mate. I'm really moved by that.

Thank you for sharing!
Cheers Psi :)

If it's suitable for any work you and your campaign colleagues are involved with, you're very welcome to use it...

Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 6:15 pm
by Catherine Edmunds
I'm with Psi. That's exceptional writing, Lugh. Quite apart from anything else, you've now convinced me that this form is worth exploring further if it can produce such moving and forceful words.

Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 6:33 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
delph_ambi wrote:I'm with Psi. That's exceptional writing, Lugh. Quite apart from anything else, you've now convinced me that this form is worth exploring further if it can produce such moving and forceful words.
Cheers Delph ...

I look forward to reading some by you my friend :D ...

Christmas Stuffing. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006

Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 10:14 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
christmas stuffing - a food fibonacci
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved.
Literary guidance from Catherine Edmunds.

  • soon
    i'm
    gonna
    blow up, then -
    pop, fart, fly around
    like a fast, deflating balloon

    see
    i've
    eaten
    way too much
    i need plink, plink fizz
    belly aches at the slightest touch

    yeah
    i
    really
    should lie down
    get off my feet. sleep
    dream about losing a few pounds

    but
    nope
    i won't
    i will make tea
    crunch a few biscuits, nibble cakes
    whinge at repeats on the t.v.

Grumpy Old Man. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2007.

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:05 am
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
grumpy old man
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2007. All rights reserved.


aye


he saw them all for what they were

parasites

mites that burrowed under his skin


they'd win

lose

or draw

he saw


'scrotes'


he would mutter


'fuckin' scrotes

i can't wait to die
'


sweet soft whispers

an old flame floated through his mind

time was gone when he wished for death


on rare days he forgave temporarily

family life

plates clink

smiles crack

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 8:35 am
by Catherine Edmunds
APOLOGIES!!!!!!! :shock:

I got the form wrong. And now you've just written a brilliant one, but it ain't a 'fib'. It's missing the first line. The sequence SHOULD be:

1, 1, 2, 3, 5, etc.

ie, 1+1=2, so you have to have the two ones at the start...

:oops:

You've still written a bloody good poem, Lugh. And I'm going to have to go back and re-write all of mine. Dammit. Or not. No. Can't be arsed. Sorry.

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:31 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
delph_ambi wrote:APOLOGIES!!!!!!! :shock:

I got the form wrong. And now you've just written a brilliant one, but it ain't a 'fib'. It's missing the first line. The sequence SHOULD be:

1, 1, 2, 3, 5, etc.

ie, 1+1=2, so you have to have the two ones at the start...

:oops:

You've still written a bloody good poem, Lugh. And I'm going to have to go back and re-write all of mine. Dammit. Or not. No. Can't be arsed. Sorry.
LMAO :P ...

What do we do now?

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:48 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
I definitely don't want to change any of the poems I've written in this thread either Delph :D ...

What if we called the thread something else and I edited your initial message to say that the poetry contained here are all variations on the; 'Fibonacci sequence' style? We could call them - wait for it;

Delph Ambient Poetry or The Edmunds' Technique :wink: ...

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 4:18 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
A further point on this. The other day I linked to a magnificent interview with Seamus Heaney by Jenny McCartney in the Telegraph. His closing words to her were;
Seamus Heaney wrote: 'Write whatever you like!'
You can read the full interview by clicking here.

So. Everything is alright Delph. Innit :D ?

No?

Ok then. I've made the appropriate adjustments to them all now Catherine.

Hyperlink is to;Telegraph.co.uk
http://www.telegraph.co.uk/arts/main.jh ... heaney.xml