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Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
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by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Sat Jan 27, 2007 11:06 pm
concerning the multiverse
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 1990 ~ 2007. All Rights Reserved. "are we still spreading out?"
a young universe did shout
to be answered
by one turning over:
"of course we are dear
but I hasten, don't fear.
youth is the truth.
now I'm younger."
the now old one did shout;
"how did this come about?"
to be answered by itself
turning over...
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by Catherine Edmunds » Tue Feb 13, 2007 7:39 pm
Love the poem; disagree with the formatting. This is how I would've done it.
"are we still spreading out?"
a young universe did shout
to be answered by one turning over:
"of course we are dear
but I hasten, don't fear.
youth is the truth, now I'm younger."
the now old one did shout;
"how did this come about?"
to be answered by itself turning over...
The scansion's still all over the place, but I don't think it particularly matters. This one's fun.
Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
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by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Wed Feb 14, 2007 12:40 am
delph_ambi wrote: Love the poem; disagree with the formatting. This is how I would've done it.
"are we still spreading out?"
a young universe did shout
to be answered by one turning over:
"of course we are dear
but I hasten, don't fear.
youth is the truth, now I'm younger."
the now old one did shout;
"how did this come about?"
to be answered by itself turning over...
The scansion's still all over the place, but I don't think it particularly matters. This one's fun.
Excellent tuition Delph.
I like it
...
Thank you
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Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
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by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh » Wed Feb 14, 2007 12:42 am
concerning the multiverse
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 1990 ~ 2007. All Rights Reserved.
Editor - Catherine Edmunds. "are we still spreading out?"
a young universe did shout
to be answered by one turning over:
"of course we are dear
but I hasten, don't fear.
youth is the truth, now I'm younger."
the now old one did shout;
"how did this come about?"
to be answered by itself turning over...
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