SENSITIZE ©

in the hum by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2008. All rights reserved.
click the poem's title above to play in the hum performed by Louis P. Burns aka
Lugh © 2008. All rights reserved.

• in the hum
  an unending babble
  of drivel spews into my room
  and i sit there, terrified to go out
  gun crime statistics
  aimed at my head go off
  the bang a backdrop
  the very rhythm of my life
  i respond as always
  by eating more junk food
  inching ever closer
  to death by natural causes
  humming a tune from my youth
  in defiance...

Louis,

This is a very honest piece of writing. I like the fear of the mainstream violence that hides outside and how the internal struggle can be even more damaging. Control, over the humming, acknowledging the struggle and continuing in 'defiance'. I like this piece very much.

Amanda Koser wrote:Louis,

This is a very honest piece of writing. I like the fear of the mainstream violence that hides outside and how the internal struggle can be even more damaging. Control, over the humming, acknowledging the struggle and continuing in 'defiance'. I like this piece very much.

Thanks Amanda

I'm not sure whether this is a completed piece or not yet. It works but I feel there is more I want to add to it to tease the malevolent underbelly of the world (the mainstream media) and address its hostility towards all of our calmness. Is it just me or is everyone at breaking point with how we're governed in our livingrooms by hype, panic and spin that forever shifts, leaving us uncertain of everything and wondering what happened to the plans we made 15 minutes ago?

I was discussing this piece with Andy earlier on messenger and we may work collaboratively on it to develop some sort of menacing drum and bass e-poem to video for the domain and website. I would really enjoy that.

Cheers for the feedback my friend. Very much appreciated.

Best wishes...

in the hum A collaborative project by Andy West and Louis P. Burns aka Lugh / http://www.upstaterenegadeproductions.com/
^ Click title to listen to the Drum 'n' version of; In the Hum.

This piece will feature as part of a broader project initiated by Andy West and entitled; Digital Disturbance Theatre. We ( Sensitize © / http://www.upstaterenegadeproductions.com ) are currently seeking input on this project to make a music video made up from either illustrations or original photography by our members. To read more about this unique offer please click the following link:

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