Feedback on Carnival by Delph_Ambi...

[Louis P. Burns aka Lugh]

Carnival by Delph_Ambi...

Spectacular and revealing piece...

Will feedback more, later ...

LATER:-

I painted the carnival in venice today
squeezed streamers onto canvas
over a past masterpiece --
a dull scottish landscape in terre verte

ben nevis is no more
upland heather cropped tight by small sheep
replaced by vivaldi gone mad

il preto rosso dances with birds of paradise
masked men befurbilowed beyond recognition
read poetry to paramours
women are men are women are who knows what I don't care
this is carnival

bonny scotland
(where chickens are chickens)
still lurks beneath but

my vast oil slick of a painting pleases me

degenerate venice has the edge
over ben nevis today

Beautiful poem Delph. I find it rounded and catching a mind's eye meeting point in the fabric of realities between two equally stunning locations, Ben Nevis and Venice...

It's amazing to me that you created the picture; Carnival In Venice from another piece and that what you say in your poem (Carnival) about its' creation is as stated. I get something completely different from it all, but then I guess good art allows for every perception of it.

I will get the image uploaded to a webpage for you on our domain sometime very soon and then create links to it through here and edit any text that you wish included...

I keep returning to Carnival In Venice on the disc you sent Delph and the more I view it, the more I like it. There are definite dimensional qualities to it that, for me at least, give the feeling of looking through thick glass that has many curves, grooves and indentations. A bit like patterned glass in a thick bar ashtray or the glass found in some front doors and the stained glass windows of churches.

For me, what lies beyond are coloured bulbs, possibly central spotlights with a dark background. These spotlights are blurred by the grooves and indentations mentioned earlier and this gives the piece a quality that reveals to me, other worlds or tangent places...

To get an idea of what I'm talking about; hold a clean ashtray, pint glass or tumbler up to the light maybe in your hall or kitchen. Then see how that light gets dispersed or displaced by whatever curves, grooves and indentations there are coming through your chosen piece of glass... Now imagine the light your holding this glass up to is coloured or there are several differently coloured lights.

I realise this probably sounds naff and, all some of you might see are several prisms through your glass, but Carnival In Venice by Delph_Ambi implies and reminds me of multiverse theories and quantum realities...

Delightful use of colours, oils and palette strokes that draw this spectator in. A captivating and highly original work...

Superb poem, and soon to be revealed, Guest Artwork by Delph...

Thanks for sharing mate ...

[Catherine Edmunds]

A stunning critique. Thank you, Lugh.

A bit more background about the original Ben Nevis painting: I did it several years ago at my local college where I've been going to art classes for years. I was going through an 'earth colours' phase, which rather than being vibrant and glowing was becoming more and more dull and dingy. I hated the picture, and accidentally on purpose forgot to take it home at the end of the academic year. The damn thing turned up a few months ago when my art teacher found it at the back of a cupboard. The horrible thing had come back to haunt me. I am supremely grateful to my teacher, the wonderful Trish Hudson-Moses, for suggesting I sand it down and start again from scratch.

Lugh, I can't put hand on heart and say yes! Multiverses! Quantum realities! but at the same time I'm delighted that the painting drew you in and you started to see so much. It was sheer joy to paint (where the original had been a slog) and I think something of the energy I felt in the re-painting may have come through. As a person with ME/CFS, I'm extremely low on energy most of the time, but this was half an hour or so of pure joy for me.

Thank you.

[Salvador Oria]

Hi Delph,
It's good to see you around. I will never forget how you helped me with my poems in other days, in other places.
I've been following your 'image cum poem' trend for a while now and, even if I wasn't very communicative before, may I say that they make a superb collage. Haven't had a look at this one though mainly because these days I'm only able to sporadical entries in writers' sites but will come to it one day; and be assured that I'll leave my mark down because I both love to write about what paintings arouse in me and to honour the artists' shows with my impressions about them.

[Catherine Edmunds]

Hi Argie,
Thanks for the comments. It's always a pleasure to read your poems, so I hope you'll post one or two here when you have a moment. You could maybe even suggest a painting as a starting point for us all to do some creative writing; a little collection of poetry and prose based on a famous image; something like that. Just thinking aloud here... In the past I've written a poem based on Constable's "Haywain", and a piece of flash fiction on Duchamp's "Nude Descending a Staircase". They were fun to do (as well as being an excellent cure for writers' block).

[Louis P. Burns aka Lugh]

Hi Argie,
Thanks for the comments. It's always a pleasure to read your poems, so I hope you'll post one or two here when you have a moment. You could maybe even suggest a painting as a starting point for us all to do some creative writing; a little collection of poetry and prose based on a famous image; something like that. Just thinking aloud here... In the past I've written a poem based on Constable's "Haywain", and a piece of flash fiction on Duchamp's "Nude Descending a Staircase". They were fun to do (as well as being an excellent cure for writers' block).

We would need to link to the official website for any recognised or classic works Delph. I'm sure that wouldn't be a problem though and most reputable arthouses and galleries should be in support of showcasing new works by new media collaborative artists and writers...

I think I would need to seek their approval first lol. Could be a goer ...